I am a mechanical student.Why did I choose this majoy?I think that there are three causes.First:Because my grade only allow me into this majoy or this school.Second:I want to study in Taipei.Third:My father's work is about this.
I thought grade is the best cause.If I have greet grade, I will choose NTU definitely.This is fault education in Taiwan.Student always into a school not that for their interest but that their grade can't let them do that.When I am one grade in senior high school, I already decide to go to Taipei for study in the future.I want to go to another place not only stay in Taichung.I like ascensive city more than country.Ascensive city can make me feel convenient and there are a lot of restaurants because I like eat delicious food and many place I can go not only stay home or school.So Taipei is the best choose.There are two school that I feel good in Taipei is NTU and NTUST.Beacause the first cause, I choose this school.So I choose school not majoy.But the majoy is an engineering at least.My father's work is about cybernation.This cause make me interested about engineering not law, business, philologic or other.So mechanical engineer is one of my chooses.
Even if this major is not the best for me, but now that I study here.I just accept it, like it and find some interesting things.I belive that I choose the right major for my future.
4 則留言:
why do you say your grade only let you into this major and school?
you say yor grade is best, then why do you only have this choice?
can you write more about this part?
I only have this question, other part that I think , write not bad.
All article is complete.
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best cause?是指最合適的理由嗎?
覺得看起來怪怪的
也許是我英文怪怪的原因吧...
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Although the department is not the best for you, but it's a great thing that you can accept it. And I have a question. You said that you chose the right major in the end, but why did you said that the department is not best for you?
Gigi (B9303045)
Topic sentence: Why I did I choose my major?
I think you don’t give readers a complete topic sentence to focus, although you come up with the title again right at the beginning of this paragraph. The reason why I say so is I couldn’t know how the article is going to develop just by the question-form topic sentence. So it would be better if you could alter it by using a positive sentence and give a concrete idea in your topic sentence. In addition to that, you don’t have a controlling idea for readers to pay attention to. I think a great example would be the reason I chose my major is based on the admission to NTUST. That example shows a clear topic sentence and gives the controlling idea—admission.
Support: the three causes, grades, a desire for studying in Taipei, and his dad’s job.
I think you give enough supports to your topic sentence. But one of your supports doesn’t directly relate to your topic sentence. And that is the desire for studying in Taipei. Personally, it has nothing to do with his major when I read it through. But fortunately, you explain this cause more in detail.
Organization used by the author: Order of importance.
In this paragraph, we can see the points you lists. The first thing you think of is your grades, and then the desire for studying in Taipei. By the order of how you list these points, we can clearly understand your grades are the most important factor in why you chose the major.
I think the paragraph I like the most is: Even if this major is not the best for me, but now that I study here.I just accept it, like it and find some interesting things.I belive that I choose the right major for my future. And if allowed, I want to know more about how poor your grades were and how you “tumbled over” and “fallen into” NTUST.
Your classmate 方偉凱 B9303009
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