2007年5月7日 星期一
Compare and contrast living at home and in the dormitory
I'm living in the dormitory now. And I like to live in the dormitory more than at home. The differents between Living at home and in the dormitory are whether life with parents or not. At home is more convenience than in the dormitory becuase mom or dad can service all things we need. We don't have to do by ourself. For example: eat and wear. Unlike at home,in the dormitory is more free. If I want to go out, I had to tell my mom at home. And she always asked me what time back. But now in the dormitory no one restrict me anymore. Costs at home less than in the dormitory. My mom always cook by herself so I needn't eat outside. On the other hand, I can save money at eat. And at home is more comfortabl. Because I need to care about other roommate whether my music or talk too loud or not in the dormitory. I feel press in the dormitory because I am not familiar with roommates unlike families. For me, I study harder at home than in the dormitory. I consider that the influence of mom urge me. I only urge me by myself in the dormitory. On the other hand, I can have fun in the dormitory and no body can request to me. I like to live in the dormitory just because I feel more free in the dormitory. I like happy atmosphere in the dormitory.
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為什麼我覺得看完之後你好像比較喜歡住家裡的感覺?不過你頭尾都說喜歡住宿舍,不過中間感覺都一直說住家裡很好?
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After reading your article, I think you should pinpoint your topic sentence more clearly. You write it this way, the difference between living at home and in the dormitory is whether to live with parents. When I read through this sentence, I immediately come up with various aspects of viewpoints. I think of houseworks, curfew, allowance and time for bed, because this topic sentence dose include too many things. Reading along, I found you gave three or four different aspects. And you explain them clearly. If you could comprise those aspects in your topic sentence, your readers would definitely have ideas about what this article is going to run through.
The supports to the topic sentence you gave do all relate to parents. I think you do well as far as the supports.
Please pay more attemtion to your sentences and your grammars.
Wayne F. B9303009 方偉凱
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